One Life of a Noobie
Posted 29 March 2007 - 08:42 PM
Now remember, I will not be talking to you as you argue with me any longer. This is my last refutation to you. Would you look at that...You're not the only one who can use big words
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Posted 29 March 2007 - 08:57 PM
Satisfied now that I've said that your fanfic sucks? It really does anyway, so I feel no remorse saying it. Since you still think that you're so superior when other writers here do it better, I have nothing more left to say, and I leave you in your delusional fantasy.
Posted 30 March 2007 - 04:21 PM
1: Cliched opening.
2: Fragmented sentence.
3: A one word sentence? No.
4: Lack of an interesting introduction for your character.
5: Usage of Maple Story slang does not go well with writing a good story for the most part.
6: Refer to no.5.
Besides that, your story is too rushed, very boring, predictable and too much in the style of Maple Story.
For your points two and three, you do understand the use of rhetoric to create a reaction from the audience, no?
Biroudou 5x Fighter
Guild Leader of illuminati
Posted 30 March 2007 - 09:30 PM
I like it. I found it to be pretty amusing, and using phrases and acronyms related to what your writing about is perfect.
Keep up the good work!
Posted 05 April 2007 - 06:30 PM
It's his story; if he doesn't want to be criticized, then don't criticize him.
Even if he did want criticisms, please try to be less harsh unless he specifically asks for it.
If you don't like it, don't read it. >__<;
Posted 31 July 2012 - 07:52 PM
Persistant arn't we? Well, as you can see, if you actually looked at the other posts on this topic, you are the only one who seems to make such harsh criticisms? Obviously I am correct. You son of a b. Sorry for the harsh letters.
A claim must be right just because more people share it than otherwise? It'd be a solid pitch, if it didn't fall apart once you gave it a little knock:
Persistant arn't we? Well, as you can see, if you actually looked at the other posts supporting 2+2=3 on this topic, you are the only one who seems to think that 2+2=4? Obviously I am correct. You son of a b. Sorry for the harsh letters.
Supporting evidence and reasoning be damned, you've got power in numbers here! Surely something to announce an immediate victory over and justify launching an insult while covering your own love with a pansy non-apology. 'Cause if you were really sorry, you wouldn't have typed those "harsh letters."
Oh and by the way. "Do you not understand this concept that I have been trying to teach you for ten times?" Quoted by you, seems as if you've made a mistake, oh king of Grammar and of the English language.
Don't you suppose it should be "Do you not understand this concept that I have been trying to teach you for the past ten times?"
1. Sounds bad
2. And should be put into past tense
Minus 100 DKP for using a weak reason like "Sounds bad" in claiming that something is blatantly wrong. Seriously? Your second point also demonstrates a lack of understanding as to what the past tense actually is (hint: adding the word 'past' to a sentence doesn't make it past tense), so in the end, you've said exactly nothing while maintaining all the pomp of having said something.
I'm quite certain that you need to be perfect before you tell others to be perfect.
No. The accuser committing a similar--or even the exact same--fault as you doesn't mean you're free to dismiss their argument. Why, because you still committed the fault. Damn man, it's like you can't just make it disappear. Not as though it's been mentioned anywhere that you need to be perfect, anyway.
I'm not a master of the English language, or whatever; neither do I aspire to become one. Even that being the case, how would pointing it out refute anything I've said?
This is my last refutation to you. Would you look at that...You're not the only one who can use big words.
You didn't even use that word correctly, because after all those leaps of logic you took in every single one of your responses, you didn't actually manage to refute anything. Refutation doesn't mean 'banging out a bunch of idiotic insults and fallacies.' Also, you're one of the worst people at arguing I've ever seen on this forum. Just saying, that's quite a feat.
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you do understand the use of rhetoric to create a reaction from the audience, no?
hory love I'll just assume you're playing the devil's advocate here. The point of bending the rules is that you do it sparingly and meaningfully or else the device loses its impact. Assuming, of course, that it's even a rhetoric, and not an elementary mistake.
More in regards to the actual work, so as long as the piece remains so poorly paced, the fragment "Quiet." has no place in it.
If you don't like it, don't read it. >__<;
Yes, because you can decide whether or not you like a piece of writing before you even read it. Don't read it, you can't know. Read a bit, you didn't give it enough of a chance. Read most or all of it, you shouldn't have read it. Therefore if we don't like OP's story we should leave it 'adequately' unread at some arbitrary point the mileage of which will vary from person to person, even though it only takes thirty seconds to go through the whole thing. That will surely help.
Edited by Dopple, 01 August 2012 - 03:40 AM.
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